This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story
Hassan
The freshly-promoted Bowie & Peter (who's much more colorful now) head back to Hassan. There's a new centaur in town.
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April Script
You are the boy who killed
the legendary Kraken?
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Final Script
Are you the boy who killed
the legendary Kraken?
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Rick thanks Peter & Bowie for letting him get to Hassan, dull as it is. He looks north of the town and spots something.
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April Script
It's Caravan...an
ancient vehicle found
in the shrine.
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Final Script
It's the Caravan...an ancient
vehicle found in the shrine.
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Rick is impressed that they found it, and decides to go with them, because he's bored, basically. Rick joins the force!
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April Script
Adventure!
Yoo ho!
Let's go!
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Final Script
Adventure!
Yo ho!
Let's go!
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Dwarven Mine
Nowhere to go but west, the newly-acquired Caravan is used to navigate the rocky rivers that separates Creed's Mansion from the other towns. Along the way is a mine run by less than seven dwarves.
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April Script
(shiver)...too cold....
oh, it's cold here....
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Final Script
(Shiver)...cold...
Oh...I'm so cold...
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The dwarves can't finish mining without this sick guy.
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April Script
One of us went to look
for the fairy.
Is he all right?
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Final Script
One of us went to look for
the fairy.
I hope he's alright.
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Harpy Pond
Heading farther west, the crew arrive at a mountain impasse. Oddler hears a voice crying for help from a nearby pond.
The force goes to investigate...
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April Script
An...Elf boy?
He's stuck in the pond.
He must very tired.
Let's pull him out.
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Final Script
An...elven boy?
He's stuck in the pond.
He must be very tired.
Let's pull him out.
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Bowie approaches the elven lad.
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April Script
Did you come to help me.
Oh, thank you!
Perhaps, I would've been
eaten by monsters if you
didn't save me.
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Final Script
Did you come to help me?
Oh, thank you!
I might have been eaten by
monsters if you hadn't come.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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Harpy said that. Seriously Peter, put your glasses back on. This is become a recurring problem.
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April Script
That pond is my trap to
get food. Hey Elf, a good
trap, huh?
Those who get stuck in
the pond are mind. It's
the rule around here.
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Final Script
That pond catches my food.
Hey elf boy, good trap, huh?
Those who get stuck in the
pond are mine. It's my
rule.
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April Script
Then...all the missing
people were eaten by you?
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Final Script
Then, all the missing people
were eaten by you?
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April Script
I ate them because they
were in my pond.
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Final Script
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April Script
And the Elf is my dinner
for today. Got it?
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Final Script
And this elf is my dinner
for tonight. Got it?
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The harpy turns to her entourage.
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April Script
[Hero], we have to
save him!
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June Script
[Hero], we have to
save him!
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Final Script
Did you guys bring the
ketchup? No? Oh, well.
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Translation Notes
The original Japanese line was spoken by the head Harpy.
The line from the April and June drafts is a duplicate line: This is what Peter says when trying to leave the area.
The final script just wings it with the ketchup line.
After defeating the Harpies (and having the common courtesy not to eat an intelligent creature), Elric is freed from the pond.
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April Script
You saved my life.
Thank you very much.
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Final Script
You saved my life.
Thank you.
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April Script
You should thank Oddler.
He heard your cries of help
and brought us here.
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Final Script
You should thank Oddler.
He heard your cry of help
and brought us here.
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April Script
| Ah, well...it was nothing.
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Final Script
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April Script
A Forest Elf always returns
a kindness with himself.
Please, let me help you on
your adventure.
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Final Script
An elf always returns a
favor.
Please, let me help you.
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April Script
[Hero], looks like
we've found a new friend.
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Final Script
[Hero], looks like
we've found another friend.
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Elric befriends the force! Also he joins.
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April Script
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Final Script
| Now, let's go see Mr. Creed!
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Outside the pond, Elric faces the mountain that blocked all progress.
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April Script
Fairy said...move this
rock in this manner and...
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Final Script
Fairy said, move this rock
in this manner, and...
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The mountain splits in twain, revealing a large chamber leading right to Creed's front lawn.
Creed Field
A spooky skeleton and his spooky skeleton crew guard the entrance to Creed's Mansion.
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April Script
(Sniff, snif)...we have
more invaders from the
continent....
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Final Script
(Sniff, sniff)...I smell
more invaders from the east.
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This is Creed's territory, the skeleton says.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
But I have to meet with him.
Please let us go in!
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Final Script
But we have to see him.
Please let us pass!
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April Script
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Final Script
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The Skeleton summons more of his monster pals.
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April Script
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Final Script
| Never mind. Get 'em boys!
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And with Bowie's blade, the boys are thusly gotten.
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April Script
Hurry. Let's go to Creed
Mansion.
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Final Script
Hurry! Let's go into
Creed's Mansion.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
Well, you're running as
if you recovered your
sight.
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Final Script
You're moving around as
if you can see.
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April Script
Am I? Maybe my other
senses have sharpened
after I lost my sight.
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Final Script
Am I? Maybe my other
senses have sharpened
since I lost my sight.
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Peter sees now. Oddler confirmed not to see now.
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April Script
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Final Script
[Hero], let's go see
Mr. Creed!
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Creed's Mansion
As Bowie & company exit the foyer, they hear conversation off-screen.
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April Script
You may go in now.
I'll talk to fairy.
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Final Script
You may go now.
I need to talk to fairy.
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A sailor-butler hybrid enters the waiting room.
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April Script
Huh? Oh....
It's time to check the
collections.
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Final Script
Tum-de-dum-dum. Oh...
Time to check the
collections.
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The servant, Goliath, unlocks a door to the left of the main door.
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April Script
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Final Script
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The startled sailor turns to Peter.
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April Script
| We came to see Mr. Creed.
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Final Script
| We've come to see Mr. Creed.
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April Script
See my master?
Do you have an
appointment?
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Final Script
My master?
Do you have an appointment?
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I'm sorry, but he has
a guest now.
Please come back later.
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Final Script
I'm sorry, but he's busy now.
Please come back later.
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Peter convenes with Bowie and Oddler.
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April Script
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Final Script
| We can't see Mr. Creed now.
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Oddler suggests forcing their way in.
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April Script
Oddler...you're getting
bold....
But it's a good idea.
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Final Script
Oddler, you're getting bold.
But, it is a good idea.
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April Script
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Final Script
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As the crew runs to the main entrance, Goliath teleports in to block them!
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April Script
You impolite children!
You can't go in!
Mr. Creed will never see
you. Go away!
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Final Script
You impolite kids!
You can't go in!
Mr. Creed is too busy!
Go away!
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Peter eyes the now unlocked door on the left.
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April Script
Let's ditch this servant
and go through that door.
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Final Script
Let's ditch this guy and go
through that door.
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April Script
[Hero], let's
do it! I don't want to
return now!
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Final Script
[Hero], let's do it!
I don't want to fail now!
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Bowie nods.
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April Script
OK, OK. We give up.
We can't meet Mr. Creed.
Let's get out of here.
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Final Script
OK, OK. We give up.
We'll see Mr. Creed later.
Let's get out of here.
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April Script
Yeah, maybe we'll come
back later.
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Final Script
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Bowie approaches the unlocked door, against the servant's warning...
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April Script
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Final Script
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...and shrink to tiny specks on the floor.
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April Script
Whoever passes through that
magic door will become
small.
Anybody who is not
protected by Mr. Creed.
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Final Script
Whoever passes through this
magic door becomes small.
That is, anybody who's not
protected by Mr. Creed.
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Goliath picks up the force -- every single member -- and places them on a nearby desktop.
Desktop Kingdom
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April Script
Well, what happened to us?
I had a strange feeling
when I entered the door.
Then, it felt like...a giant
lifted me up!
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Final Script
What happened?
A strange feeling swept over
me when I entered that door.
Then, it felt like...I was
lifted upward!
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Peter can't explain it in detail, but somehow they've become small. Goliath confirms his suspicions.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I said, go back.
You didn't listen to my
advice.
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Final Script
I told you not to go in
there. You didn't listen
to my warning.
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After one last bit of mockery, Goliath exits the room. Peter tells Bowie to cheer up.
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April Script
I agree! We can meet
Creed some other time.
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Final Script
I agree! We can meet Creed
later.
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Since this is a kingdom, Bowie makes the king's acquaintance.
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April Script
So you were not able to
see Creed?
Somewhere in the Floor
World, there's a tunnel
to Creed.
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Final Script
So, you were not able to see
Creed?
Somewhere in Floor World,
there's a tunnel that leads
to Creed.
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The King promises to reveal this tunnel to Bowie if he defeat his Chessboard Army.
[1. f3 e5 2. g4 Qh4#] later...
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April Script
Wonderful!
This is for you.
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Final Script
Checkmate!
This is for you.
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A large chest with a Cotton Balloon has appeared in the middle of the chessboard through chess magic.
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April Script
With it you can leave
Desktop safely.
Good luck!
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Final Script
With it you can leave
Desktop Kingdom safely.
Good luck!
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Floor World
With the Cotton Balloon, which looks more like a spore, the force safely lands in Floor World.
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April Script
| Cotton Balloon has popped.
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Final Script
| The Cotton Balloon popped.
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Spotting a hole in the wall, Bowie and the others amble through to somewhere much more earthy.
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April Script
(Sniff, snif)...it smells
like a ditch!
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Final Script
(Sniff, sniff)...
It smells like a ditch!
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Peter wonders if it's the smell of devils. Pan over to giant rats! Well, normal-sized rats. Pink and blue normal-sized rats!!
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April Script
| Hee, hee! Did you call me?
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Final Script
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The rats do a little dance. It's quite engaging.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I welcome you, silly chicken.
It's dinner time!
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Final Script
Welcome!
It's dinner time!
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The rats are punished for trying to expand their culinary palate. Stop trying to eat Bowie and Peter, guys.
And then, after much travel, the force finally reaches Creed...'s floor.
Creed's Mansion (Again)
Creed, a devil with a majestic mane, yells out for his servant.
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April Script
| I'm here! I'm coming now!
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Final Script
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Creed noticed that his collection is noisy today. Goliath fidgets.
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April Script
No, nothing...I have added
to your collection today.
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Final Script
No, I...I added to your
collection today.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Goliath tried to stop them.
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April Script
You didn't lock the door,
did you?
I said, always lock the magic
door!
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Final Script
You didn't lock the door, did
you?
I told you to always lock
that door!
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Calming down for a moment, Creed asks to see the new additions.
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April Script
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Final Script
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After the poor servant leaves, Creed is alerted to the sound of tiny talking people.
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April Script
Oh, my collection is
talking!
You don't know me?
Are you collection or not?
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Final Script
Oh, someone from my
collection is talking!
You must be one of the people
Goliath was talking about.
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April Script
We came to see you, Creed.
Please return us to our
original size, first!
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Final Script
We came to see you.
Please return us to our
original size.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
Make us bigger, now!
My neck hurts!
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Final Script
Make us bigger. My neck
hurts from looking up at you!
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Creed casts the antediluvian Abra-Kadabra spell, restoring the party to their original size.
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April Script
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Final Script
| Wow, we're back to normal!
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April Script
Now, why do you want to
see me?
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Final Script
Now, why did you want to see
me?
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April Script
Oh, yes!
Tell us about Zeon!
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Final Script
Oh, yes!
We want to know about Zeon!
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Zeon's name alerts the Fairy guest in the mansion.
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April Script
The devil king who was
sealed in Arc Valley?
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Final Script
The King of the Devils who is
sealed in Arc Valley?
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April Script
What's happening with
Zeon? Has he revived?
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Final Script
Did something happen to
Zeon? Has he revived?
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Bowie nods. The Fairy exclaims her disbelief!
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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Bowie nods yet again.
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April Script
So, Zeon appeared again...
He will destroy all that
is on the ground.
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Final Script
So, Zeon will appear again...
He will destroy everything.
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Translation Notes
The April draft is more accurate to the game's plot, and with King Bedoe's description of Zeon.
The servant races back from the collection room.
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April Script
The new additions to your
collection are missing!
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Final Script
Sir, the new additions to
your collection are missing!
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Creed already knows, of course.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I said I know it!
Now, go away!
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Final Script
It doesn't matter how!
Now, go away!
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April Script
We were just talking
about that.
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Final Script
Wow! I can't believe this
is happening!
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April Script
You know, Grans Island
has been under a dark
cloud.
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Final Script
You know, Grans Island is
covered by a dark cloud.
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North Parmecia has had no rain, but South Parmecia is okay...
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April Script
That's because of God
Volcanon.
I'm afraid about what
happened to Mitula.
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Final Script
That's because of Volcanon.
I fear for Mitula....
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April Script
Volcanon and Mitula are
invincible to everything,
but Zeon!
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Final Script
Volcanon and Mitula are
invulnerable to everything,
except Zeon!
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Goliath, who still hasn't left yet, expresses his concern. Creed expresses his anger.
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April Script
I have no time to scold
him now!
The Evil Jewel may know
something.
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Final Script
I have no time to scold you
now!
The Evil Spirit may know
something.
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Creed runs off to his creepy basement.
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April Script
You guys, follow him,
follow him!
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Final Script
You guys, follow him.
Follow him!
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Those guys follow him.
Area Dialogue
Forest Village
A helpful sailor (the non-servant kind) gives the crew directions.
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April Script
To Creed Mansion?
Only the fairy knows how
to open the tunnel.
But, maybe <Elric>
knows because he is a
friend of the fairy.
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Final Script
To Creed Mansion?
Only the fairy knows how to
get there.
But, maybe [Elric] knows
because he is a friend of
the fairy.
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According to this elven women, Elric went to look for the fairy.
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April Script
Did you know, west forest
is very dangerous!
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Final Script
The forest to the west is
very dangerous.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
There are three bookshelves in this town. One of them is holding the Secret Book item.
The other book descriptions were deleted to make the Secret Book's presence more obvious.
The book text is still in the ROM, though, as the censored "HOME-MADE POTIONS"
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
This is also present in the final ROM, unchanged but inaccessible.
Time Trial
Hidden to the right of the village is a secret, fourth wall-breaking time trial mini-game.
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April Script
Now set a new record.
Best record so far is
XXXX min.YY sec.
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Final Script
Now, set a new record.
Best record so far is
XXX min. YY sec.
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Translation Notes
The spacing between minutes and seconds was fixed by the final draft.
If Bowie decides against doing this weird game:
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April Script
Oh, what's a pity!
Please visit me anytime!!
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Final Script
Oh, what a pity!
Please vist me anytime!!
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Or, if Bowie succeeds and sets a new record:
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April Script
You recorded
XX min.YY sec.
Congratulations!
You made it!
Come back again!
See you!
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June Script
You recorded
XX min.YY sec.
Congratulations!
You made it!
Come back again!
See ya!
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Final Script
You recorded
XX min. YY sec.
Congratulations!
You made it!
Come back again!
See ya!
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Desktop Kingdom
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April Script
The devil Creed is a fine
gentleman.
His magic saved us when we
had a sudden eruption.
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Final Script
Creed is a fine gentleman.
His magic saved us a long time
ago during a natural disaster.
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Translation Notes
The actual nature of the disaster, a volcanic eruption, is glossed over in later scripts.
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April Script
Devils cannot use their
magic to effect human
lives.
It's their rule. So, we
promised him we'd to stay
here.
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June Script
Devils cannot use their magic
to effect human lives.
Supposedly, it's one of their
rules.
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Final Script
Devils cannot use their magic
to affect human lives.
Supposedly, it's one of their
rules.
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Translation Notes
The promise to live in Desktop Kingdom is only stated in the April script.
An old man is existential:
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April Script
We never get old.
We never die.
Why do we live?
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Final Script
We never get old.
We never die.
What is the meaning of life?
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Two would-be party members are trapped in a lilliputian state.
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April Script
You are people from the
outside! Why did you
come here?
Then you should get
out soon.
I suggest you go see King
Ponpei.
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Final Script
Are you from the outside?
Why did you come here?
Ah, a mistake. I see.
I suggest you see King
Ponpei.
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April Script
I happened to be involved
in the eruption.
I was looking for the
legendary sword.
I miss adventures.
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Final Script
I was there during the
disaster.
I was looking for the
legendary sword.
I hate it here!
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The lone soldier gives some information on the upcoming challenge.
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April Script
The Chess Army is truly
strong.
It will be good training
for you.
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Final Script
The Chess Army is very
strong.
It will be good training for
you.
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April Script
The battle begins when
you get to the center
of the board.
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Final Script
The army won't attack until
you reach the center of the
board.
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Translation Notes
This is incorrect; You have to get to the opposite side of the board to start the battle.
Encourage words from the King's maid:
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April Script
I'm sure King Ponpei would
help you.
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Final Script
I'm sure King Ponpei will
help you.
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The Desktop Army sounds off!
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April Script
My attack power is the
best in the Army!
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Final Script
My attack power is the best
in the army!
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April Script
Healing is my only ability?
Ha, ha! You have a lot
to learn!
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Final Script
Is healing is my only ability?
Ha, ha! You have a lot to
learn!
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Translation Notes
The clunky and erroneous "Is healing is" was introduced in rewrites to the April script.
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April Script
Mr. Creed gave me this
solid armored body!
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Final Script
Mr. Creed gave me this solid,
armored body!
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April Script
I lead the army with the
king.
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Final Script
| I lead the army with the King.
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April Script
Chess Army of the Desktop
Kingdom is a well balanced
force!
If it is King Ponpei's
order, we accept your
challenge!
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Final Script
The Chess Army of Desktop
Kingdom is a well balanced
force!
If it is King Ponpei's wish,
we will accept your
challenge!
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After the chess battle:
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April Script
Bravo! I'd give an army
if you stay here.
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Final Script
Bravo! I'd give you an army
if you'd stay here.
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April Script
He is pretending, but to
tell the truth,
it's a very special
treasure.
Don't waste it.
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Final Script
He's just kidding, but to
tell the truth, the Cotton
Balloon is a very special
treasure.
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Floor World
A teen boy is trying to lift a (relatively) giant ring off of the floor.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
It's too heavy...I can't
carry it...I give up!
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Final Script
It's too heavy. I can't
lift it. I give up!
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Tyrin came down here to escape, but those rats in the tunnel are keeping him here.
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April Script
They're too ferocious.
I think we shouldn't
leave Desktop.
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Final Script
They're too ferocious!
I'm gonna stay in Floor
World.
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Randolf gives advice on entering strange holes.
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April Script
You want to go to
Creed's room?
Are you serious?!
A hole in the wall leads
to the room, but don'tuse it!
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June Script
You want see Creed?
Are you serious?!
A hole in the wall leads
to Creed, but don't use it!
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Final Script
You want to see Creed?
Are you serious?!
A hole in the wall leads
to Creed, but don't use it!
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(Source: Original TCRF research)
