This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story
Dojo
Oh yeah, there's a dojo on the west coast. Behind that dojo is a waterfall. Under that waterfall is a naked nude woman with no clothes on. She notices the force.
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April Script
Don't you know this is a sacred place?!
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Final Script
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April Script
She's too beautiful for you. Back, back!
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Final Script
She's too beautiful for you! Back, back!
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Astral slowly pushes Bowie and Peter away, but stops when the woman recognizes him, confusing the codger
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April Script
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Final Script
Oh...you don't remember me?
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April Script
I'm [Sheela], I was your pupil at Galam. I was preparing to become a priest.
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Final Script
I'm [Sheela]. I was a pupil of yours in Galam. I was preparing to become a priest.
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April Script
[Sheela]! I can't believe it! You were never so charming!
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Final Script
[Sheela]! I can't believe it!
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Translation Notes
This should be the last set of Astral's lascivious comments that needed to be toned down.
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April Script
I know you have a scar on your chest. You sneaked up on my and tapped my shoulder....
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Final Script
How is that scar on your chest. Remember? You snuck up behind me and tapped my shoulder....
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April Script
And [Sheela] kicked me in the chest...and it left a scar. Nobody but [Sheela] knows about the scar...Oh, you became so beautiful!
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Final Script
And you kicked me in the chest...and it left a scar. How could I forget. Nobody but [Sheela] knew about that scar.... It still aches sometimes.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
The next five lines had to be rewritten due to lewdness and rudeness.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
This rewrite, though? That not OK.
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April Script
Were you this lewd when you were young?
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Final Script
Hey, aren't you going to introduce us?
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April Script
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Final Script
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Astral strikes Peter, presumably. The screen shakes, at any rate.
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April Script
Do your bossiness. By the way, why are you here?
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Final Script
All in good time. By the way, what are you doing here?
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April Script
To kill Red Balon. He killed my fiance.
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June Script
I came to kill the Red Baron. He killed my fiance.
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Final Script
I came to kill Red Baron. He killed my fiance.
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April Script
You said you were getting married in your letters.
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
A nice little detail that was rewritten for some reason.
Sheela asks why Astral came back to Grans.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
He is destroying the entire world. He must be stopped!
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Final Script
He'll destroy the entire world. He must be stopped!
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April Script
Is Red Balon his follower?
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Final Script
Is Red Baron his follower?
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...maybe.
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April Script
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Final Script
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A monk outfit appears above the lake.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Sheela jumps out of the lake, does a flip, changes in mid-air and sticks the landing.
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April Script
Sir Astral, please let me go with you to defeat Zeon.
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Final Script
Sir Astral, please let me go with you.
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April Script
We welcome you, but can fight?
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Final Script
We welcome you, but can you fight?
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Yes; Sheela's a Master Monk now.
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April Script
You must've had quite a bit of training!
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Final Script
We could always use another well-trained fighter!
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Sheela joins the force!
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April Script
Many Galam soldiers are there in the west. Be careful.
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Final Script
Many Galam soldiers are in the west. We must be careful.
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Northern Grans
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April Script
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Final Script
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Pan to Geshp, already standing in the middle of the field.
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April Script
Unbelievable! You're really have heart?
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Final Script
Unbelievable! You really are persistent.
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April Script
Shut up! We cannot die 'till we destroy all of you.
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Final Script
We'll never stop! We will not die until we destroy all of you.
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Translation Notes
Maybe they could have changed to "shush up."
Geshp gives instructions to his troops, then escapes. Didn't see that coming from a mile away.
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April Script
I think Geshp needs time to prepare his next trap. After him now!
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Final Script
Geshp sure is a tricky devil. After him, now!
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Translation Notes
Astral loses a bit of insight in the final script.
Roft
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April Script
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Final Script
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He runs away.
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April Script
No, no! We're not Galam soldiers!
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Final Script
No, wait! We're not Galam soldiers!
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He comes back.
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April Script
Oh, sorry. You're not from Galam.
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Final Script
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April Script
Oh, it's easy. I can see it your eyes.
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Final Script
Oh, it's obvious. I can see it in your eyes.
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We cut to Pedro's death scene already in progress. Pedro's lying in bed, with Paseran and an unknown woman by his side.
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April Script
You promised me I'd fly in the sky!
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Final Script
You promised to fly me in the sky!
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April Script
Oh, yeah...with the Nazca Ship...I promised.... I'd fly home...to see my family.... To show how wonderful the ancient people were....
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Final Script
I know...with the Nazca Ship...I promised... I'd fly home...to see my family.... To show them how wonderful the ancients were....
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Petro dies. As the group exits the room, Zynk fumes, stomping around angrily. Peter asks Astral what's wrong with him.
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April Script
I have no idea, but he's so anxious!
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Final Script
I have no idea, but he's obviously disturbed!
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Zynk paces for a bit, then turns to face the force.
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April Script
[Hero], Sir Astral! I'm angry!
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Final Script
[Hero], Sir Astral! I am angry!
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April Script
I can't forgive the devils! I...I...
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Final Script
I cannot forgive the devils!
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April Script
I've overridden my restrictions on fighting.
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Final Script
I have overridden my restrictions on fighting.
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April Script
I'm joining your force as a soldier!
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Final Script
I am joining your force as a soldier!
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Zynk joins the force!
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April Script
Let's go defeat the devil army!
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June Script
Let us go defeat the devil army!
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Final Script
Let us go defeat the Devil Army!
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Grans Tunnel
Time to put that dismembered golem arm to good use.
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April Script
[Hero] put the Golem Arm on Golem.
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June Script
[Hero] put the Arm of Golem on Golem.
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Final Script
[Hero] put the Arm of Golem on the golem.
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April Script
That feels good... My full power is back! Thanks to you, I can move again! How can I express... Oh, yes! I'll follow you! I'll protect you!
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Final Script
That feels good... My power is back! Thank you. I can move again! How can I express... Oh, yes! I'll join you! I'll protect you!
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Claude protects the force!
Now that the tunnel to Parmecia is open, the force returns to visit Creed, because they just decided they wanted to, okay?! Geeze.
Creed's Mansion
The mansion's in disrepair, Oddler is missing, and Creed's gone. What happened here?
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April Script
Oddler regained his memory and suddenly he went berserk. He had a fearful face. But my master seemed to understand everything. He fell to the sea to stop Oddler. Is Mr. Creed alive?
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Final Script
Oddler regained his memory and suddenly went berserk. He had a fearful face, but my master seemed to understand everything. He fell into the sea to stop Oddler. Is Mr. Creed still alive?
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The other three potential force members have grown back to their normal size, so that's a positive.
Eric...
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April Script
My room was broken into and I returned... They rushed out, but I couldn't catch them...
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Final Script
I really want to find the legendary magic sword.... But I can't do that if I'm stuck here.
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Translation Notes
Eric went from trying to be helpful to being a sword-obsessed goon.
...Randolf...
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April Script
I was surprised to find I've returned to my original size!
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Final Script
I was surprised to find I had returned to my original size!
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...and Tyrin join the force!
Oh, and if for some reason Eric is turned down...
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April Script
No? Then I continue my search for the legendary magic sword.
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June Script
No? Then I'll continue my search for the legendary magic sword.
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Final Script
No? Then I'll continue my search for the legendary magic sword alone.
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That didn't happen though. Now, back to the plot.
Prism Flower Field
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
The June script uses the final line, but is missing the "button prompt" control code.
Pan to Geshp standing in his usual spot.
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April Script
expected. But, don't worry. I just finished my work. Now to welcome you. It's show time!
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Final Script
Darn you, Granseal swine! But, don't worry. I just finished my preparations. Yes...everything's ready. It's show time!
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Translation Notes
There's no button prompt after the first line in the June script.
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April Script
Sir Astral...why is he smiling?
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Final Script
Sir Astral, why is he smiling?
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April Script
He believes this is the place were we'll die....
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June Script
He believes this is the place were we will die....
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Final Script
He believes this is the place where we will die....
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It isn't. Turns out that stationary flowers aren't the ultimate embodiments of power, even if they shoot lasers.
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April Script
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Prism Flowers? My Prism Flowers!
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April Script
[Hero], I shall return with Red Balon! You'll pay for this!
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Final Script
[Hero], I shall return with Red Baron! You'll pay for this!
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Galam Field
And another battle. Zeon and Geshp are pulling out all the stops to keep the force from progressing, as well they should.
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April Script
How are you today, [Hero], Astral?
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Final Script
Now you shall pay for killing my precious Prism Flowers.
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Translation Notes
More instances of the greater devils' dialogue being rewritten to fit a specific personality.
Pan to...the obvious.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Peter asks where the next trap is.
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April Script
Come on, [Peter], I'm not such a bad guy. I just want to introduce you to my friend.
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Final Script
Would I do that? I just want to introduce you to my friend.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Red Baron, a familiar-looking crimson-clad cloaked centurion, says hello in mumblese.
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April Script
See his red armor? It's smeared with blood. He has killed so very many people.
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Final Script
See his red armor? It's smeared with blood. He has killed so very many people.
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April Script
Now, see you later. I look forward to seeing you again.
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Final Script
Now, it's your turn. This will be your undoing.
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April Script
Sir Astral, he's crying....
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Final Script
Sir Astral, he's...crying!
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April Script
I think...I've seen his way of fighting before. Let's see his face.
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Final Script
I think I've seen his style of fighting before. Let's see his face.
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Astral removes the mask. Now let's see who the mass-murdering madman REALLY is!
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April Script
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Final Script
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Lemon's limp body glows with an unholy light, bringing him back to life!
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April Script
Oh, Sir Astral! I... had a nightmare....
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Final Script
Oh, Sir Astral! I had an awful nightmare.
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Sadly, it wasn't a dream.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
You were controlled by a devil. And he made you kill every person you saw. You recovered your senses because we defeated the devils.
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Final Script
You were being controlled by a devil. And he made you kill every person you saw. You recovered your senses when we defeated the devils.
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April Script
Ah, what should we do? How should I atone for my sins.
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Final Script
What can I do? How can I atone for my sins?
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April Script
You're not to blame. It's not your fault. The devils are to blame.
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Final Script
You're not at fault. It's not your fault. The devils are to blame.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I have to die for them. It's my atonement.
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Final Script
I have to die for my sins. It will be my atonement.
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Lemon flees to Galam. Peter wonders if Astral's just going to let him die.
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April Script
[Lemon] is an immortal vampire now. He can't die so easily.
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Final Script
[Lemon] is an immortal vampire now. He can't die very easily.
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And on that cheery note, the force returns to Galam.
Area Dialogue
Dojo
Only three monks talk in the Dojo, and this is the only one with text differences.
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April Script
We, master monks are dedicated to mental research! We train ourselves to approach gods.
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Final Script
Monks are dedicated to studying the powers of the mind. We train very hard.
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Translation Notes
Possibly rewritten due to religious reasons.
Roft
Hey, the Mithril that the force has been collecting might not be useless after all.
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April Script
Nobody but the Dwarven Blacksmith can work upon Mithril.
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June Script
Nobody but the Dwarven Blacksmith can work upon Mithril.
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Final Script
Nobody but the Dwarven Blacksmith can work with Mithril.
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In France, he's known as Le Balon Rouge.
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April Script
Red Balon is a cruel killer. His armor has been smeared with blood.
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June Script
Red Baron is a cruel killer. He has smeared his armor with with blood of his enemies.
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Final Script
Red Baron is a cruel killer. He has smeared his armor with the blood of his enemies.
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How did Petro get back, anyway? The answer may surprise you.
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April Script
The devils kidnapped Mr. Petro and stole Nazca Ship.
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Final Script
The devils kidnapped Mr. Petro and stole the Nazca Ship.
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Paseran mourns the death of his mentor.
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April Script
(sob...sob...) You're gone...
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Final Script
(Sob...Sob...) He's gone....
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After exiting and reentering the town, both Paseran and the unknown woman's dialogue change.
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April Script
The Nazca Ship was broken? I hope Petro gets on the Nazca Ship in heaven.
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Final Script
The Nazca Ship crashed? I hope Petro gets on the Nazca Ship in the great beyond.
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Translation Notes
This was definitely rewritten due to religious reasons. We have the trifecta of no-nos here:
- Astral's lewdness.
- Religious references.
- Telling people to shut up.
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April Script
The devils lied then they killed Petro.
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Final Script
The devils lied, and then killed Petro.
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Standard shop sign changes.
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April Script
Various Weapons ...Shopkeeper
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Final Script
Various Weapons -Shopkeeper
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April Script
Various Tools ...Shopkeeper
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June Script
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Final Script
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(Source: Original TCRF research)