This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story
Galam
As Bowie's group crosses Galam's drawbridge, Geshp reports back to Zeon.
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April Script
Once again, my minions
have failed me.
Are my soldiers too weak?
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Final Script
Once again, my minions have
failed me.
Are my soldiers that weak?
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April Script
Yes...oh, no! I mean,
they were strong enough.
But [Hero] and his force
were stronger than that.
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June Script
Yes...oh, no! I mean, they
were strong enough.
But [Hero] and his force
were stronger.
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Final Script
Yes...oh, no! I mean, they
were strong enough.
But [Hero] and his force
were smarter.
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April Script
No more excuses!
This is your last chance.
Kill [Hero] at this time,
or I'll kill you!
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Final Script
No more excuses!
This is your last chance.
Kill [Hero] this time,
or I'll kill you!
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April Script
Ah...yes, sir...I'll kill
[Hero] to prove my
loyalty to you.
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Final Script
Ah...yes, sir. I'll kill
[Hero] this time.
I stake my life on it.
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April Script
Go and bring the Jewel of
the Evil back to me!
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Final Script
Bring the Jewel of Evil back to
me!
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Geshp does a much fancier version of his warping animation to impress Zeon -- it doesn't -- and Odd Eye enters. Zeon says that Odd Eye was right before.
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April Script
This is the choice of the
god...[Hero] was chosen.
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
Odd Eye shows some amount of reverence for Bowie in the April script.
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April Script
I don't trust Geshp any more.
If he fails, I want you
to battle [Hero].
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Final Script
I can't trust Geshp anymore.
If he fails, you must battle
[Hero].
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April Script
[Hero] could be much
stronger now...hmmm,
sounds interesting.
I'll do it. This will be
the battle between good
and evil.
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Final Script
He's probably much stronger
now.
Hmmm, sounds interesting.
I'll do it. If this comes
to pass, it will be his final
battle.
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Granseal Field
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April Script
Finally you've arrived.
It was my mistake to
underestimate you.
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Final Script
Finally, you've arrived.
It was a mistake to
underestimate you.
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Geshp's in his usual place on the battlefield.
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April Script
Geshp is serious...
He considers us worthy
opponents.
[Hero], be careful.
We can't underestimate
his power.
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Final Script
Geshp is serious.
He finally considers us
worthy opponents.
[Hero], be careful.
We mustn't underrate his
power.
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April Script
Zeon abandoned me...thanks
to you!
This is my last chance.
I can't see him again 'till I
bring him your head.
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Final Script
Zeon doesn't trust me,
thanks to you!
This is my last chance.
I can't see him again 'til I
bring him your head.
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One battle later...
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April Script
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Final Script
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Geshp rights himself.
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April Script
I'm at the end of my
rope...I must escape....
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Final Script
I'm...at the end of my rope.
I...must...escape.
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Geshp staggers around before walking into Bowie, whose Jewel of Light repels him. It's pitiable. Geshp begs the force to let him go.
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April Script
We don't want to kill
you...you've lost your
power.
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Final Script
We don't want to kill
you.
You've lost your powers.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
Geshp isn't as thankful in the April draft. More...terrified.
Geshp crawls towards Galam.
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April Script
| Nowhere will be safe for me.
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Final Script
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He walks a few more meters before the screen dims. It's Zeon.
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April Script
Do you remember your
promise?
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Final Script
| Do you remember your vow?
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Geshp shakes his head.
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April Script
You failed to get the jewel
from [Hero].
You will now pay me with
your life.
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Final Script
You failed to get the jewel
from [Hero].
Now, you will pay with your
life.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Suddenly, eight fireballs surround Geshp. Each fireball slams into the greater demon, immolating him. The force is horrified by Zeon's malicious power.
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April Script
He will do the same thing
to us when we lose to him.
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Final Script
He will do the same to us
if we lose to him.
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Yeel
Lemon stands on the edge of Yeel's southwestern plateau.
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April Script
I've killed a lot of
people for the devils!
My death will make there
souls rest easier!
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Final Script
I've killed a lot of people
for the devils!
The guilt is too much to
handle. I must die!
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Lemon jumps headfirst into the ground, making a literal lemon-shaped hole in the ground.
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April Script
Gosh, [Lemon] killed
himself!
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Final Script
Gee!
[Lemon] killed himself!
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April Script
No, [Lemon] is not able
to kill himself by jumping
off a cliff.
[Lemon] is now immortal
he's a vampire.
I don't know it's good
for him or not.
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Final Script
No, [Lemon] cannot die
by jumping off a cliff.
[Lemon] is an immortal
vampire.
But, I'm sure the impact
didn't feel too good.
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That conspicuous piano in Yeel must do something special...
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April Script
It's a fine looking piano.
Do you play?
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Final Script
It's a fine-looking piano.
Will you play it?
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If not...
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April Script
[Hero], can't you
play it?
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Final Script
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As Bowie plays the piano, the earth trembles. Didn't think it was that bad. Or good, whichever. The important thing is that the piano reveals a set of stairs in the church.
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April Script
Ah, finally the devils
found the secret door.
I must give them time to
escape from here!
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Final Script
Ah, devils finally found the
hidden door.
I must give the people time
to escape!
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April Script
The priest showed them
a holy symbol.
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Final Script
The priest pulls out a holy
symbol.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
He's mistaking us for
the devils.
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Final Script
| He's mistaking us for devils.
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April Script
What tough devils!
My symbol doesn't make
them sick!
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Final Script
What tough devils!
My symbol doesn't drive
them away!
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April Script
Excuse me...we're not
devils.
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Final Script
| Excuse me, we're not devils.
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The priest isn't buying it.
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April Script
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Final Script
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A long-haired mustached man appears at the top of the stairwell.
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April Script
[Chaz], they've
found out how to open
the door!
I tried to stun them with
this holy symbol, but I
failed.
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Final Script
[Chaz], they found the
hidden door!
I tried to drive them away
with this holy symbol, but
I failed.
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April Script
| Then...they're not devils.
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Final Script
| Then, they're not devils.
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April Script
Nobody but devils ever
come to such a dangerous
place! They're devils!
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Final Script
Nobody but devils ever come
to such a dangerous place!
They must be devils!
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
How can we explain this
to you?
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Final Script
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Astral explains they're from Granseal, here to hunt devils. Chaz is excited to recognize Sir Astral.
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April Script
Yes, but...I'm sorry,
who are you?
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Final Script
Yes, but...I'm sorry, have
we met?
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April Script
I'm [Chaz], a son
of Hawel.
Don't you remember me?
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Final Script
I'm [Chaz], a son of
Hawel.
Do you remember me?
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April Script
Oh, [Chaz]!
Yes, yes, I remember you.
Nice to see you again.
What are you doing here,
[Chaz]?
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Final Script
Oh, [Chaz]!
Yes, of course.
Nice to see you again.
What are you doing here?
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Chaz came back to Yeel to continue his departed dad's work.
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April Script
[Chaz], maybe you can
answer some questions I have?
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Final Script
[Chaz], maybe you can
answer some questions?
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April Script
Perhaps.
What would you like to
know, Sir?
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Final Script
I'll try.
What would you like to know?
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April Script
Oh, this will be a great
help! Thanks!
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Final Script
Oh, this will be a great
help!
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They head down the stairs...
Meanwhile, in an alternate universe where Bowie opened up the Ancient Tower somehow, Chaz asks if they're going to defeat the devils.
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April Script
Yes. [Hero] just
solved the secret. We
can now enter the tower.
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Final Script
Yep. [Hero] just
solved the secret. We
can now enter the tower.
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The priest faces Chaz, then turns to Bowie.
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April Script
I would like to give you
a rest.
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Final Script
I would like to give you
a hand.
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They head down the stairs...in an alternate way.
Yeel Underground
Astral and Chaz sit across from each other at a table.
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April Script
...and now that we are
all here.
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Final Script
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April Script
Wow...your story is too
complicated to understand
perfectly.
But, from what I understand
Zeon is reviving.
All these disasters were
caused by him, right?
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Final Script
Wow! Your story is so
complicated.
But, from what I understand,
Zeon is reviving.
And all these disasters were
caused by him?
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April Script
That's right. We have to
find out where the holy
sword is.
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Final Script
That's right. We have to
find out where the Holy
Sword is.
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April Script
I think I've seen it in
a book before.
Yes, I did...but...hmmm
I don't remember...
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Final Script
I think I've seen it in a
book....
Yes, I did...but...
I don't remember....
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
| Please, give me a moment.
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Chaz paces back and forth, thinking. He searches through a nearby bookshelf.
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April Script
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Final Script
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He walks away from the shelf for a bit. After thinking for a bit more, he runs over and grabs another book.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Yes, but...the important pages in the book have been stolen.
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April Script
Maybe Galam....
Oh, we've lost the key.
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Final Script
Who could've taken it?
Oh, we've lost the key.
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April Script
We have one more key,
Sir Astral.
We can believe in
[Hero].
He was chosen by the gods.
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Final Script
Not necessarily, Sir Astral.
Believe in [Hero].
He was chosen by the gods.
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April Script
[Hero], we have to
find the holy sword and
the door to the tower.
The legend only hints of
you, but we believe in you.
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Final Script
[Hero], we have to
find the Holy Sword and
the door to the tower.
The legends only hint of
you, but we believe in you.
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April Script
Believe in the power of
your jewels!
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Final Script
Believe in the power of
your jewel!
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Chaz blocks the passage out. Seems he still wants something.
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April Script
[Hero], would you
mind if I go with you?
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Final Script
[Hero], would you mind
if I went with you?
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Astral says he has to continue Hawel's work.
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April Script
I knew you'd say that, but
I can't continue the work
if Zeon revives.
Also, as a historian I
want to see the legendary
devil.
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Final Script
I knew you'd say that, but I
can't continue my work if
Zeon revives.
Also, as a historian, I
want to see the King of
the Devils.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Chaz joins the force!
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April Script
Adventure! It sounds
so exciting.
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Final Script
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April Script
It's not a sight-seeing
trip! OK, let's go,
[Hero]!
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Final Script
This is not a sight-seeing
tour, OK?!
Let's go [Hero]!
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Yeel
The force is stopped by Lemon as they leave the town.
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April Script
| May I join in your force?
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June Script
| May I join in your force?
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Final Script
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April Script
You can trust me.
I was born a fighter.
As you know, I'm looking
for the place to die.
I would like to die for
you. Please let join!
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Final Script
You can trust me.
I'm a born fighter.
As you know, I want to die.
I will die fighting for your
cause, if you let me.
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April Script
He's a hero of Galam.
I think we should let him.
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Final Script
He's a hero in Galam.
I think he should join us.
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April Script
[Lemon], please come
with us. You'll be a great
help to us.
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Final Script
[Lemon], please come
with us. You'll be a great
help.
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Lemon joins the party!
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April Script
Oh, thank you! I know I
take the devil king!
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Final Script
Oh, thank you! I know I can
take the King of the Devils!
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Granseal Field
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April Script
I just received information
that Geshp lost.
All greater devils have been
defeated except for Odd Eye.
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Final Script
I just heard that Geshp
lost.
All greater devils have been
defeated except for Odd Eye.
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The Hydra hatches a scheme to nab the jewel and get a juicy promotion from Zeon.
Hydras are not renowned for their scheme-hatchery.
Ancient Shrine
The force heads down to the basement of the shrine.
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April Script
The Jewel of Light
begins to glow.
The light seems to
lead [Hero].
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Final Script
The Jewel of Light begins
to glow.
The light seems to pull
[Hero].
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Bowie is pulled to where the jewels once were.
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April Script
| The jewel begins to glow.
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Final Script
The jewel glows even
brighter.
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The jewel wall collapses, revealing a secret room. Inside the room is a sword, naturally.
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April Script
The holy sword is stuck
deep stable into the rock.
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Final Script
The Holy Sword is stuck
deeply into the rock.
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Bowie effortlessly pulls the sword out of the rock. The Force Sword joins the sword force!
Devil's Head
East of the Ancient Tower is a giant stone devil head. Bowie pulls out the Force Sword and stabs the head in its mouth, opening a passage to a hellish place...
Area Dialogue
Galam
What's Red Baron up to?
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April Script
Red Balon is [Lemon].
He was running around
and crying, "Somebody
kill me, please!▓█
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Final Script
Red Baron is [Lemon].
He was running around and
crying for somebody to kill
him.
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Translation Notes
The later drafts write around the quotation marks.
This poor woman isn't aware that the Galam/Granseal war ended over a year ago.
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April Script
My boyfriend has not
returned from the war...
He may have been killed
by now...(sob, sob)....
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Final Script
My boyfriend has not
returned from the war...
I hope he's alive...
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Translation Notes
Well, she certainly got an optimism injection in her brain-hole.
Is Yeel haunted by...g-g-g-g-spirits?
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April Script
I heard from a soldier
that Yeel is haunted.
Nobody in the village,
but you, can hear a piano.
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Final Script
I heard from a soldier that
Yeel is haunted.
He said that he heard the
sound of a piano playing.
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Well, not a whole statue, but otherwise this guy's on the ball.
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April Script
Do you know about the
statue of the devil? It
appeared at the Ancient
Tower.
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Final Script
Do you know about the stautue
of the devil? It appeared
at the Ancient Tower.
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Translation Notes
The "stautue" typo was introduced in the June draft.
This soldier saw Red Baron go to the Ancient Tower.
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April Script
Nobody returned from that
trip. I didn't go.
I was lucky!
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Final Script
Nobody returned from that
trip. I didn't go. I was
smart!
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This soldier saw something spookier.
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April Script
I...I saw it...many devils
came from the tower....
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Final Script
I...I saw them...many devils
came from the tower....
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The old tower entrance isn't going to work.
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April Script
You want to go into the
tower?
Impossible. It's now
buried to the ground and
there's no door.
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June Script
You want enter the tower?
Impossible. It's buried in
the ground and there is no
door.
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Final Script
You want to enter the tower?
Impossible. It's buried in
the ground and there is no
door.
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Hole lotta nothing.
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April Script
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June Script
It reads...
RESPECT YOUR PARENTS
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
The Japanese and April drafts have a null dialogue pointer for the hole.
The June script uses one of Galam's sign's text as a placeholder.
The final draft finally adds a (rather unremarkable) descriptor for the hole.
Devil's Head
Let's look at the head that looks at the force.
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April Script
A statue of a devil.
It looks ready to bite
you.
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Final Script
A statue of a devil's head.
It looks ready to bite you.
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(Source: Original TCRF research)
