Proto:Pikmin 2/Cutscene Text

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Crash Landing

Demo	Final
...Alert! Danger! Louie is missing. He must have somehow fallen out of his cockpit. ...He is not responding via his communicator, either. He is either flouting protocol...or in danger. Olimar! You must find Louie before he freezes to death in the cold of this planet!	Alert! Danger! Louie is missing. He must have somehow fallen out of his cockpit. ...He is not responding via his communicator. He is either flouting protocol...or in danger! Olimar! You must find Louie before he freezes to death in the cold of this planet!

Along with some minor rewording to get the text to fit, Olimar and Louie's names are now color-coded.

Louie's Link

Demo	Final
Attention! Captain Olimar! I have just now reestablished my communications link with Louie. Louie! Allow me to assess your condition per our safety protocols. Are you at all injured?	Attention! Captain Olimar! I have just reestablished my communications link with Louie. Louie! Allow me to assess your condition, as per our safety protocols. Are you at all injured?

Saving some space by eliminating unneeded words, and fixing some grammar.

Demo	Final
Press START/PAUSE to communicate with me and obtain information about the terrain.	Press START/PAUSE to contact me and obtain information about the terrain.

Same thing here. Plus, you can't actually talk to the ship. Though that would be pretty great.

Meet Red Pikmin

Demo	Final
You can use (C) to issue objectives to and change the direction of your Pikmin squad.	You can use (C) to issue objectives to your Pikmin squad and even direct their movement.

Some odd sentence structuring was fixed.

Demo	Final
Louie... My sensors have detected some drool in the corner of your mouth. Are you all right?	Louie... My sensors have detected drool in the corner of your mouth. Are you all right?

Reformatted to fit in the message box.

Onion Mechanics

Demo	Final
The Onion ejected more seeds! The pellet from that flower must hold nutrients that grow Pikmin.	The Onion ejected more seeds! The pellet from that flower must hold nutrients that breed Pikmin.

Text is colored to emphasize important points for the confused and lazy.

Demo	Final
The Onion is a Pikmin mother ship!	The Onion is a Pikmin mother ship!

Here too.

The First Treasure

Demo	Final
Perhaps this object is one of the pieces of treasure that we are searching for! The only reason we found it here is because this is where you crash-landed. How fortunate.	Perhaps this object is one of the treasures that we are searching for! The only reason we found it here is because this is where you crash-landed. How fortunate!

The Ship sounds more excited about its fortune in the final script.

Day 1 Ends

Demo	Final
I took the liberty of naming it when I appraised it. The name reflects my current "thinking".	I took the liberty of naming it when I appraised it. The name reflects my current "thinking."

Extremely minor grammar fix.

Day 2 Starts

Demo	Final
Good morning! Ready for another day of working hard for your company, boss, and families?	Good morning, workers! Ready for another day of toiling for the profit of your company?

This text is more cynical in the final script.

Damaged Suit

Demo	Final
Your spacesuit has sustained damage! Excessive damage to the suit could be life-threatening. If you sustain too much damage, I am sorry, but the day's operations will end immediately. I have no suit-repair facilities, so you must repair your suit yourself at the end of each day. Your spacesuit power meter is the round gauge on the bottom- left. Pay close attention to it.	Your space suit has sustained damage! Excessive damage to the suit could be life threatening. If you sustain too much damage, I'm afraid to say the day's operations will end immediately. I have no suit-repair facilities, so you must repair your suit yourself at the end of each day. Your space suit power meter is the round gauge on the bottom- left. Pay close attention to it.

The main change here is altering "spacesuit" to be two words.

The Gate

Demo

Final

The Pikmin should be able to destroy this earthen wall. Tear it down and proceed onward! Command them as you would in a battle with a hostile creature. Tilt (C) to drive the group into the wall or throw them onto it. It may take some time to fall. While they work, you can kick back and relax. Then you'll know what it feels like to be a corporate executive!

How could Pikmin destroy such a massive wall? When massed, their might is ferocious! Louie! Did Olimar instruct you on proper Pikmin- commanding protocol? Apparently not. Olimar! You are failing in your duty as a superior! Allow me to explain... Press (A) to grab Pikmin and release to throw them. Call them into a group with (B). Press (X) to disband the group. Use (C) to issue orders and objectives to the group. (C) is useful for swarming Pikmin around treasure and enemies, or making them march in a line!

The script for this cutscene in the early text suggests it would have appeared before the gate was destroyed, not after.
The early script uses this cutscene to teach the player how to destroy gates, while the final text, at this point, reiterates everything the player learned on Day 1.

Finding the First Cave

Demo	Final
Interesting... Warm air is welling up from the hole in the ground that opens before you. What could lie underground? ...What is wrong? You both show expressions of unease.	Interesting... Warm air is welling up from the hole in the ground before you. What could lie underground? ...What is wrong? You both show expressions of unease.

More rewording and reformatting for space reasons.

First Cave Intro

Demo	Final
Intriguing... My heat sensors indicate that inside this hole it is warmer than out on the surface.	Intriguing... My heat sensors indicate that this hole's interior is warmer than on the surface.

The final sentence flows a bit better.

Enemies != Treasure

Demo	Final
Krzzzt-zzzt-zrrrk! How can you possibly consider beasts treasure?!?	Krzzzt-zzzt-zrrrk! How can you possibly consider this beast a treasure?!?

This was depluralized. Which is not a word, but it should be.

Deeper Into the Cave

Demo	Final
This hole appears to be quite deep. My sensors indicate more complicated terrain ahead.	This hole appears to be quite deep. My sensors indicate more treacherous terrain ahead.

Slight changed for the ominous.

Violet Candypop Bud

Demo	Final
This...appears to be a variety of candypop bud, but ship logs show no record of a purple one. Data indicates tossing a Pikmin into a candypop bud will change it into the color of the bud. But no theories suggest the existence of Pikmin matching the color of this bud. Perhaps you should experiment by tossing a Pikmin in...	Astounding! A flower blooms in a cave deep beneath the snowy landscape! Clearly it is warmer down here than above. Look. The Pikmin are restless... They look as if they yearn to be tossed into the flower.

The early script pretty much spoils what's about to happen, so it was changed.

Meet Purple Pikmin

Demo	Final
Amazing! This is a purple Pikmin! It has hair...and is quite stocky. It seems very heavy and powerful.	Amazing! A purple Pikmin! It has hair...and is quite stocky. It seems very heavy and strong.

Reworded to fit in the message box.

Demo	Final
Transforming Pikmin by tossing them into flowers is intriguing. Perhaps there are other types...	Transforming Pikmin by tossing them into flowers? Intriguing... Perhaps there are others...?

Yet another set of minor punctuation changes.

Return to the Surface

Demo	Final
You have successfully returned to the planet's surface! Processing... How interesting. The clock indicates the same time that it did when you went underground... A geomagnetic radiation field underground must have warped the space-time continuum. Even my record of the terrain has been erased.	You have successfully returned to the planet's surface! Excellent decision making, gentlemen! We must celebrate your first successful spelunking expedition! You've gathered a large amount of data that needs in-depth analysis. I shall send a report back to the president tonight detailing your progress.

The early script gives an explanation as to why time doesn't pass inside caves, as well as why the layout is randomly generated. For whatever reason, this explanation was limited to the manual of the final version.

Day 2 Ends

Demo	Final
...What? You still want to work?!? Unacceptable! You do not realize it, but you both are exhausted!	...What? You still want to work?! Unacceptable! You may not realize it, but you are exhausted!

The Ship addresses both Olimar and Louie in the original script, while the final is more ambiguous.

Extinction Averted

Demo	Final
Disaster averted! All your Pikmin were wiped out yesterday, but their onion just released a seed!	Disaster averted! All your Pikmin were wiped out yesterday, but their Onion just released a seed!

Onion is properly capitalized in the final game.

Eating Nectar

Demo	Final
It appears to have enhanced motor skills. What a wondrous nectar that must be. How intriguing! Like plants, Pikmin mature from leaf, to bud, to flower. Captain Olimar! You must share the information you have with subordinates like Louie!	It appears to have enhanced motor skills. What a wondrous nectar! How intriguing... Like plants, Pikmin mature from leaf, to bud, to flower. Captain Olimar! You must share the information you have with your subordinate, Louie!

Olimar wishes he had more than one subordinate.

Using Spicy Spray

Demo	Final
Astounding! The Pikmin's heads are glowing, and they seem extremely agitated.	Astounding! The heads of the Pikmin are glowing, and they seem extremely agitated.

Reworded to fit in the message box.

95 Pikmin

Demo	Final
...But I currently observe only 95 on the surface. Could there be wild Pikmin somewhere?	...But I currently observe only 95 on the surface. Could there be wild Pikmin somewhere?

Message box limits are tricky.

Intro - White Flower Garden

Demo	Final
Astounding! My metal detectors are reacting violently. What could be down below?	Astounding! My metal detectors are reacting violently. What could be down below?

This
is a formatting change.

Demo	Final
The exploration pod will drop its treasure to make room to carry you, Louie, and the Pikmin above.	The exploration pod will drop its loot to make room to carry you, Louie, and the Pikmin to safety.

Slight rewording. Loot is a cool word.

Ivory Candypop Bud

Demo	Final
What an interesting development: the Pikmin look as if they long to be tossed into the flower...	What an interesting development: the Pikmin look as if they long to be tossed into the flower...

Identical text, but it's colored to give the player a bit of an extra push.

White Pikmin Eaten

Demo	Final
Intriguing. The creature displayed symptoms of severe poisoning upon consuming the white Pikmin.	Intriguing! The creature showed symptoms of poisoning after consuming the white Pikmin.

Rewording + punctuation changes.

Burgeoning Spiderwort Mold

Demo	Final
This place was once green and lush. This odd growth seems to be the cause of all the withering.	What is this? A strange, moldlike botanical entity has spread across the ground here. Interesting. I am detecting other plant life suffocating beneath it.

Intro - Citadel of Spiders

Demo	Final
Krzzt! My sensors are giving out foreboding signals. These signals could very well mean... ...that this hole is filled with wretched, nasty bugs. Dangerous, life-threatening bugs.	Krzzt! My sensors are giving out foreboding signals. These signals could very well mean... ...that this hole is filled with wretched, nasty bugs! Vicious, program-terminating bugs!

Changing "life-threatening" to "program-terminating" changes the ship's message from concern for the captains to cowardly self-interest. Also, it's a pun.

Yellow Pikmin Spotted

Demo	Final
It would be most helpful if they remember you, as did the red ones. Yes, most helpful.	It would be most helpful if they remember you, like the red ones did. Yes, most helpful.

This got polished.

Meet Yellow Pikmin

Demo	Final
The yellow Pikmin have climbed down the tree and approached! They are staring in this direction.	The yellow Pikmin have climbed down the tree and are staring in this direction!

Reworded to (wait for it) fit in the message box.

Intro - Glutton's Kitchen

Demo	Final
...Interesting. My odor detectors are reacting... The scent wafts from the hole before you.	Interesting! My odor detectors are reacting... A strong scent wafts from that hole!

The ship's text was made less ponderous.

Meet Blue Pikmin

Demo	Final
These are surely blue Pikmin! Like the other types, they appear to be staring directly at you.	They must be blue Pikmin! Like the other types, they look to you for direction.

Reworded to make sense.

Intro - Frontier Cavern

Demo	Final
Yet another cave discovered! Venturing to the farthest reaches has rewarded you!	Yet another cave discovered! Venturing to the farthest reaches has proven rewarding!

Intro - Subterranean Complex

Demo	Final
Interesting... My metal detectors are reacting quite violently! I can only conclude that there may be some sort of machine below, but that seems illogical.	Interesting... My metal detectors are reacting violently! I can only conclude that there may be some sort of machine below, but that seems illogical...

This game loves ellipses...

Intro - Bulblax Kingdom

Demo	Final
What could be happening in the depths of the earth?	What force is at work in the depths of the planet?

Intro - Snagret Hole

Demo	Final
Intriguing! My audio sensors are picking up a high-pitched wail.	Intriguing! My acoustic sensors are picking up a high-pitched wail.

Acoustic sounds better than audio.

Intro - Shower Room

Demo	Final
A strange rock sits in the water. Sensors indicate this piece of matter blocks a cavern entrance. Perhaps something sits in wait beneath. I shall attempt a stone reading to predict what is below! Just as creases in a palm can be read, so can creases on a stone. They speak of the rock's past... ...Astounding! Results indicate that an enticing encounter awaits you below!	A large rock sits in a reservoir of water. May I interject here? I have been observing the two of you working together. You have been cooperating well. Yet, to face the dangers ahead, you must be free of the shackles of a boss-worker relationship! Learn to use (X) to separate and (Y) to change leaders. If you can master teamwork, you can overcome any impediment!

The Ship's amazing rock reading dialogue was replaced with the game telling the player how to separate and change leaders, a bit of foreshadowing on how to defeat the Ranging Bloyster in the cave.

Intro - Submerged Castle

Demo	Final
Interesting! Deeper sections of this crevice seem to be submerged in liquid... Sadly, I am a delicate piece of machinery that cannot touch water. You two must go alone.	Interesting! Deeper sections of this hole seem to be submerged in liquid... Sadly, I am a delicate piece of machinery that is sensitive to water. You two must go alone.

Waterwraith Appears

Demo	Final
What is this?!? I can see it with my optical receptors, but my sensors do not react to it at all!	What is this?!? I can see it with my optical receptors, but my sensors cannot detect it!

Message fitting rejiggery.

Meet Bulbmin

Demo	Final
The confused Bulborb has fallen in with the Pikmin. They appear to coexist peacefully. Strange...this Bulborb has a leaf sprouting from its spine, much like the leaf on a Pikmin's head...	The confused bulborb has fallen in with the Pikmin. They appear to coexist peacefully. Strange...this bulborb has a leaf sprouting from its spine, much like the leaf on a Pikmin's head.

Because bulborb is a species, it was decapitalized, which is also not a word but should be.

Return to The Planet

Demo	Final
Mr. President! You've arrived! This planet is so laden with treasure, it is like a dream come true. We shall make Hocotate freight the shining, golden king of deep-space, long-haul freight! Then everyone will be gaudily covered in gold, like me! ...No. I am unique. And beautiful. Yes...	Mr. President! You've arrived! My scans indicate this planet is still heavily laden with treasure. We shall make Hocotate Freight the golden, indisputable king of deep-space, long-haul freight! Then everyone will be gaudily clad in gold, like me! ...No. I am unique. And beautiful. Yes.

Intro - Cavern of Chaos

Demo	Final
... Well, if you still wish to enter, keep wits and courage in check, and just focus on surviving.	Well, if you still wish to enter, keep your daring in check and just focus on surviving.

The early script doesn't seem to know what "keep in check" means.

Intro - Dream Den

Demo	Final
Perhaps you will find Louie in here! ...And yet, my CPU is edgy. Surely ludicrous dangers await. It is the bottom of the bottom of the deepest, darkest, most foul, sinister, horribly vile depths. Do you still wish to enter? Of course you do. It is that courage that is our true treasure.	Perhaps you will find Louie in here! ...And yet, my CPU is on edge. Ludicrous dangers await! Beasts lurk at the bottom of the deepest, darkest, most foul, sinister, horribly vile pit. Do you still wish to enter? Of course you do. Courage is our true treasure!

More rewriting to improve how the text reads.

Louie is Found

Demo	Final
Is that Louie?!? Mr. President! I have located Louie buried in a vast mound of treasure!	Is that Louie?!? Mr. President! I have located Louie resting on a vast mound of treasure!

Corrected in the final script, since Louie isn't actually buried in the treasure.

Demo	Final
We may still be in time. Quickly! To Louie's aid!	There may yet be time. Quickly! To Louie's aid!

Standard space-saving change.

Louie Rescued

Demo	Final
... Is your life fading? ... No! He appears only to have fainted! He is always running into trouble and fainting.	... Are your life functions fading? ... No! He appears only to have fainted! He is always running into trouble...

Very slight censorship and tightening.

Demo	Final
We will have to keep him in the cargo hold with the treasure.	We will have to keep him in the cargo hold with the treasure hoard.

And again.

Challenge Mode Intro

Demo	Final
Try to earn as many points as you can to earn fortune and glory as a treasure hunter.	Earn as many points as you can to achieve fame, fortune, and glory!

Challenge Mode - Next Floor

Demo	Final
A hole that continues deeper underground has opened! On to the next treasures!	A hole that continues deeper underground has opened! Journey deeper for more treasures!

Aesthetic rewording? Yep.