Proto:Shining Force II/Chapter 16

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Story

Pacalon Castle

After passing through the now hydrated Pacalon, the force approaches Frayja, their ticket to the Nazca ship.

April Script You're trustworthy soldiers, so...would you do me a favor?

Final Script You are trustworthy soldiers, so...would you do me a favor?

Frayja asks for the force to accompany him to Moun.

April Script I believe...there are survivors in Moun.

Final Script I believe there are survivors in Moun.

Translation Notes
Both lines are factually correct, though Nazca is more immediate, and Nazca is inconsistently romanized here.

April Script We have to go through Moun to get to Grans, right?

June Script We have to go through Moun to get to Grans, right?

Final Script We have to go through Moun to get to Nazka, right?

Peter and Bowie agree to take Frayja with them.

Pacalon

April Script Finally you're here, Vicar [Frayja].

Final Script Finally, you've left the castle, Vicar [Frayja].

Geshp teleports onto the scene.

April Script So, you remember.

Final Script So, you remember me.

April Script What's your plan?

Final Script What do you want?

April Script It's my strategy, not a plan. I'm very happy to see you to come out of the castle.

Final Script I have plans for you. I'm very happy that you came out of the castle.

April Script What?

Final Script Why?

April Script Vicar [Frayja], you locked the gate of Moun, remember? My faithful soldiers can't enter Parmecia.. Now, you will open it?

Final Script Vicar [Frayja]...you locked the door of Moun. Remember? My faithful soliders can't enter Parmecia. Now, you will open it!

April Script [Frayja], run away!

Final Script [Frayja], run!

He tries to, but Frayja comes face to face with a fire wall.

April Script Ha, ha, you can't.

Final Script Ha, ha. He can't.

Geshp turns away from the force.

April Script Cameela, come here!

Final Script Cameela! Cameeeeeela!

April Script Cameela...we met her at Pangoat Valley.

Final Script Cameela?! We met her in Pangoat Valley.

She warps in.

April Script Did you call me?

Final Script What?

April Script Cameela, [Frayja] is here now. Take the key to the gate!

Final Script Ah, Cameela. You're here. Get the key for me!

April Script Geshp...you're cunning as usual.

Final Script Geshp, you're as devious as usual.

April Script That I am. Now, take the key!

Final Script That I am. Now, get the key!

April Script Me? Why?

Final Script Me?! Why?

An impatient Geshp stomps on the ground.

April Script Cameela?

Final Script Cameela!

April Script I hate your cunning way. I won't help you. You want the key? Then, do it by yourself. You can use my army.

Final Script I hate you! I won't help you. You want the key? You get it! You can use my army.

Cameela exits, stage warp.

April Script That witch! Cameela! Cameela!

Final Script That witch! Cameela! Cameela!!

Geshp takes a moment to sulk before sending devils after the Bowie bunch.

April Script bye, [Hero].

Final Script Bye, [Hero].

April Script Are you trying to escape?

Final Script You're not staying?

April Script I'm good at using my brain, not my power.

Final Script I'm good at using my brains, not my strength.

And he leaves. Luckily Bowie is good at using both, and the battle is won.

Moun Field

Guess what? There's another battle. Geshp's soldiers are here!

April Script He ordered me to decrease your power. But, that's not enough. This is the end of your resistance.

Final Script He ordered me to take out some of your people. But, it's not enough. This is the end of your resistance.

April Script Now, get them! Kill them, kill them all!

Final Script Kill them, kill them all!

Blah blah blah another battle...wait a minute. Jaro, one of the soldiers in the devil army, defects! Well that's something.

April Script I can't believe it! You might be killed by the devils.

Final Script I can't believe it! You might have been killed by the devils.

April Script Indeed...and why did you change your mind?

Final Script Indeed! Why did you change your mind?

April Script I can't stand their selfish behavior!

Final Script I can't stand their wicked ways!

April Script You have the same opinion as we do.

Final Script You have the same opinion of them as we do.

April Script I think you need a professional soldier like me.

Final Script You need a professional soldier like me.

Astral agrees.

Translation Notes
Peter's comment changed from a literal statement of time passed to a figure of speech.

April Script But...he was on the opposite side just an hour ago.

Final Script But, he was on the other side just an minute ago.

April Script I don't care, [Peter]. [Jaro] was forced to do so.

Final Script I don't care, [Peter]. He has seen the error of his ways.

April Script [Hero], do you agree to let [Jaro] join our force?

Final Script [Hero], don't you want [Jaro] to join our force?

Bowie nods. Jaro joins the force!

Moun

April Script I'm opening the gate of Moun. Devils are waiting inside. Be careful...

Final Script I'm opening the gate of Moun. Devils are waiting inside. Be careful!

Frayja opens the gate. As the force walks in, they spy a group of monsters in the northwest.

Translation Notes
Another religious reference rewritten around by the script team.

April Script Welcome, silly soldiers! Do you want to follow the Moun people to purgatory?

Final Script Welcome, losers! Will you follow the example of the people of Moun and die without resistance?

April Script Ah...it's too late...I killed a lot of people.... I'll never forgive you!

Final Script No! I'm too late. I killed a lot of people. I can never forgive myself!

Translation Notes
Confusing rewrite here. Frayja is certainly bloodthirsty for a man of the cloth.

April Script [Hero], please let me fight with you. I can't allow them to advance!

Final Script [Hero], please let me fight with you. They must die!

Frayja joins the force!

April Script [Hero]...[Frayja] will be a great help to us.

Final Script [Hero], [Frayja] will be a great asset.

And, if the party is already full...

April Script [Character] returned to the Caravan.

Final Script [Character] returns to the Caravan.

April Script [Hero], [Frayja] is right. We can't let them advance any further!

Final Script [Hero], [Frayja] is right. They must die!

And die they did do, done dead.

April Script There might be some survivors somewhere in the town.

Final Script There may be survivors somewhere.

A metallic man peeks out from under a nearby rock. Peter approaches the rock.

April Script Don't touch my rock!

Final Script Do not touch my rock!

The shiny soldier makes itself known.

April Script Was it you who defeated all those devils? I was just wondering why it became silent so suddenly.

Final Script Did you defeat all those devils? I was wondering why it became quiet so suddenly.

Translation Notes
Most of the contractions in Zynk's speech were removed to make him seem more robotic.
A few contractions were mistakenly left in the Nazca scripts, but it was a nice attempt.

April Script I'm [Zynk]. I'm not from Moun.

Final Script I am [Zynk]. I am not from Moun.

April Script Then where did you come from?

Final Script Then, where are you from?

April Script From the past.

Final Script The past.

Astral asks what the hell that means.

Translation Notes
Someone in the localization team liked Popeye, apparently.

April Script Well...ah...how should I explain this? Well, I'm what I am. That's all.

Final Script I cannot explain. I am what I am. That is all that I am.

The mechanical marvel throws the rock aside, revealing his full form.

April Script I've never seen anyone who looks like you. Where are the Moun people? Were they all killed by the devils?

Final Script I've never seen anyone like you. Where are the people of Moun? Were there any survivors?

April Script Some have survived.

Final Script Some.

April Script Down here follow me.

Final Script Down here. Follow me.

April Script Follow [Zynk]! [Zynk] knows the place where they're hiding.

Final Script Follow [Zynk]! [Zynk] knows where they're hiding.

Moun Underground

Underneath Moun are a scattering of survivors, a surplus of jars, and a large bearded warrior.

April Script Well, you're not from Pacalon are you?

Final Script Well, you're not from Pacalon, are you?

They're from Granseal, which you, but not Gyan, should know by this point.

April Script Granseal...I've never heard of it before....

Final Script Granseal...I've never heard of it....

It's near Ribble, says Astral.

April Script Near my home? I don't know of it....

Final Script Near my home? Are you sure?

April Script We settled just over one year ago.

Final Script We settled there just over a year ago.

April Script The blocked tunnel is now open?

Final Script The blocked tunnel is open now?

April Script Exactly. Now you can go back to your home.

Final Script Yes. Now you can go back home.

April Script Yes, I've been waiting for this today!

Final Script I've been waiting for this day!

Gyan walks past the force, asking why they came to North Parmecia anyway. To defeat devils, Peter says.

April Script Pardon me?

Final Script Really?

April Script We don't want to have another tragedy like Moun. We're going to Grans Island to kill the King King of Devils.

Final Script We don't want another tragedy like Moun. We're going to Grans Island to kill the King of the Devils.

April Script Mmmm....

Final Script Hmmm....

April Script I can't go back!

Final Script I can't go back now!

April Script But, your family misses you a lot.

Final Script But...your family...

April Script I know. I miss them too!

Final Script I know. I'll miss them.

April Script But...I believe they'll understand.

Final Script But, I believe they'll understand.

Gyan joins the force! On the way out, Zynk decides he wants to tag along too.

Translation Notes
In the original script, Zynk knows Pedro, something important to know for a later event.
The new line is generic dialogue, so this rewrite is just baffling and unnecessary.

April Script Sir Pedlo! [Zynk] is going back home!

Final Script There is no time to waste!

After taking a free writhing Arm of Golem, it's on to Nazca!

Nazca

Cameela's already here.

April Script Remember, I promised Iwould se e you again. Come on. Let's have a party!

Final Script Remember, I promised that I would see you again. Come on. Let's party!

Geshp teleports in to give Cameela his war plan.

April Script You again, Geshp. Why don't you leave me alone?

Final Script You again, Geshp? Why don't you leave me alone?

April Script Zeon left me in charge. I don't care if you are killed or not.

Final Script Zeon left me in charge. It doesn't matter if you are killed or not.

Translation Notes
A rewrite that forgot to delete an important word. Welcome to die!

April Script Then kill me! If you're serious. Ha, ha! I know. You want me to be killed!

June Script Then kill me, if you've got the guts to do it! I know. You want me to be dead!

Final Script Then kill me, if you've got the guts to do it! I know. You want me to be die!

Geshp teleports out. What a jerk.

April Script Silly Cameela. You can't survive without my brain.

Final Script Silly Cameela. You can't survive without my brains.

Cameela disagrees...

...but it turns out Geshp was right.

April Script [Hero]...I lost?! This is for you.

Final Script [Hero], I lost?! Take this.

April Script Cameela took out the Sky Orb.

Final Script Cameela reveals the Sky Orb.

April Script This is the Sky Orb. You can drive the Nazca Ship with this stone.

Final Script This is the Sky Orb. With it, you can drive the Nazca Ship.

Before Cameela can fully elaborate on Geshp's plan, ol' purple brows speaks.

April Script Your role is over, Cameela!

Final Script Your life is over, Cameela!

Cameela is suddenly immolated!

April Script Geshp...!

Final Script Geshp!

Cameela explodes, as you do.

April Script That was horrible!

Final Script How horrible!

April Script It's a rule. Traitors die by fire.

Final Script It's the law. Traitors die by fire.

April Script Oh, I have to go now and prepare the welcome party for you!

Final Script I have to go now and prepare your welcoming party!

Peter wonders what the Prism Flowers Cameela spoke of are.

April Script I have no idea, but it might a special trap.

Final Script I have no idea, but it's probably a trap.

April Script Ancient kingdoms used to have those flowers along their borders.

Final Script Ancient countries had those flowers along their borders.

April Script What kind of flowers?

Final Script What kind of flowers are they?

April Script I can't explain well...

Final Script I cannot explain....

April Script We can see them when we arrive at Grans.

Final Script We will see them when we arrive at Grans.

April Script Right...[Hero], Take the Sky Orb. Let's go.

Final Script [Hero], grab the Sky Orb. Let's go.

Nazca Ship

Inside the massive ship, Zynk stands beside an inactive console. Well, only one thing to do.

April Script [Hero] fit the Sky Orb into the pedestal.

Final Script [Hero] fit the Sky Orb into the cockpit.

The entire ship starts vibrating. Zynk says everything's fine...

April Script But...but.. woooooow!

Final Script But...but... Woooooow!

The bird-shaped ship picks up off the ground and begins to fly!

Nazca Flight

Translation Notes
The June script forgot to put the actual year in. Oopsy.

April Script I've never experienced this in my 70-year-life!

June Script I've never experienced anything like this in my -year-life!

Final Script I've never experienced anything like this in my seventy years of life!

Zynk directs the ship westwards, to Grans Island.

April Script Oh...we're flying...

Final Script Oh, we're flying!

April Script Ancient people were much greater than we thought!

Final Script The Ancients were greater than we thought!

Zynk takes this as a compliment.

Cut to Zeon's lair...

April Script [Hero]'s coming to this island.

Final Script [Hero] is almost here already?

April Script Yes, sir. With an ancient aircraft. He will be passing over the cape soon.

Final Script Yes, sir. With an ancient aircraft. He'll be passing over the cape soon.

April Script Good, good. I'll do anything to get back my power.

Final Script Good. I'll do anything to get my powers back.

April Script They're stronger than we thought... I have an idea. Please let me try it.

Final Script They're stronger than we thought. But, I have an idea. Please let me try it.

Translation Notes
In the June script, the dialogue break here is one line ahead of where it should be.
So, for the rest of this scene, the dialogue and speaker are out of sync.

April Script I think it's better for us to them down before they get any closer.

June Script I think it's better for us to shoot them down over the cape. I agree.

Final Script I think it's better for us to shoot them down over the cape.

Zeon agrees to the plan. Zeon asks to borrow Odd Eye, but he's still damaged from the Volcanon fight.

Translation Notes
"Red Baron" is consistently referred to as "Red Balon" in the April draft.

April Script You can use Red Balon instead.

Final Script Take Red Baron instead.

April Script Ah...thank you, sir.

Final Script Thank you, sir.

April Script They're now arriving at the cape.

Final Script They'll be passing over the cape soon.

Geshp does what he does best; Leave. Odd Eye enters the room in his absence.

April Script Silly Geshp! He wants to obtain everything.

Final Script That Geshp! He wants everything.

April Script Do you think so, too?

Final Script You noticed that too?

April Script I'm afraid Geshp can't stop [Hero]'s journey.

Final Script I'm afraid Geshp can't stop [Hero]'s advance.

April Script You really think he can't?

Final Script You really think so?

April Script I was just thinking of [Hero]'s hidden power. We must never make light of him.

Final Script I was just thinking of [Hero]'s hidden powers. We must never underestimate him.

Cut to an unknown grassland location. Geshp and his soldiers are setting up pink flowers facing to the east.

April Script Now, c'mon Granseal losers! The Prism Flowers are waiting for your arrival! Hee, heee!

Final Script Now, c'mon Granseal losers! The Prism Flowers are waiting for you! Hee, heee!

Cut back to the Nazca ship, now flying over the ocean.

April Script Can you see it? There's Grans Island!

Final Script There's Grans Island!

April Script Really? Oh, great!

Final Script Alright!

April Script Finally we've come back.

Final Script We've finally come home.

Now it's back to Geshp in the Prism Flower AccuCenter.

April Script I see the Nazca Ship! Now, everybody, get ready!

Final Script I see the Nazca Ship! Everybody, get ready!

And back to the ship.

April Script What's that? I saw a flash over there.

Final Script What's that? I saw a flash of light over there.

April Script I didn't see it. You must be daydreaming because you're so old! Ha, ha!

Final Script I didn't see it. You must be seeing things because you're so old! Ha, ha!

Translation Notes
Telling people to shut up is rude and Sega of America will not stand for it.

April Script What did you say?! Shut up, [Peter]!

Final Script (Grumble).... Someday, [Peter]....

Geshp again. The flowers start firing lasers. Yep.

Meanwhile, at the flying bird ship, Astral is insistent he saw a flash'

April Script I didn't.

Final Script Well, I didn't.

April Script This might be an ill omen.

Final Script This could be bad.

One of the Prism lasers hit the ship.

April Script Oooouu!! What was that? Lightening?

Final Script Oooouu!! What was that?! Lightning?

More lasers hit. Zynk has lost control of the ship!

April Script We might fall to the ground!

Final Script We might crash!

April Script Fall?!

Final Script Crash?!

The ship is rocked with even more laser fire.

April Script Are we falling yet?

Final Script I don't want to crash!

Astral asks Zynk to land on the cape. Under heavy laser fire, he's able to crash into the cape. The ship powers down.

Downed Ship

The ship powers down. Peter, shaken by the flight, looks for Astral.

April Script Oh, Sir Astral!

Final Script Oh, there he is!

Astral is immobile until Bowie approaches him. He shakes himself out of paralysis.

April Script [Hero], Geshp must be coming for us! Get off the ship now!

Final Script [Hero], Geshp's probably coming for us! Evacuate the ship!

Astral and the others exit, leaving the ship forever.

R.I.P. Bird Ship.

Area Dialogue

Pacalon

Pacalon citizens celebrate the much-needed rainfall.

April Script Rain! Rain! This must be a present from the god!

Final Script Rain! This must be a present from the gods!

April Script Thanks to the rain, I'm no longer thirsty. But, still hungry.

Final Script Thanks to the rain, I'm no longer thirsty. But, I'm still hungry.

April Script Was Tristan occupied by the devils? That's why we had no rain recently.

Final Script Was Tristan occupied by devils? That's why we've had no rain lately.

Pacalon Castle

After Mitula's gift of rain, the Pacalon soldiers are doing well...ish.

April Script Practice, practice! Ha! Ooo...I can't lift up this spear!

Final Script Practice? Who needs practice?! Ha! Oooh...I can't lift this spear!

April Script I'm no longer thirsty, but I've not recovered my health yet.

Final Script I'm no longer thirsty, but I'm not totally healthy yet.

Here's a Frayja update.

April Script Vicar [Frayja] wants to go to Moun to save the people there.

Final Script Vicar [Frayja] wants to go to Moun and save the people.

Gyan's been trapped on the other side for a year. That's rough, man.

April Script I saw a warrior who came from the south a year ago...is he OK now? He was shocked to know that there's no tunnel, and went to Moun.

Final Script I just saw a warrior who came from the south a year ago. He was shocked to find out that the tunnel was blocked, and went to Moun.

And now, an important message about tolerance.

April Script But I didn't imagine centaurs would be saved by humans!

Final Script But I didn't think we would be saved by humans!

April Script I'm sorry for his impolite words. We've always believed that centaurs were the best race on the ground. But we were wrong. I understand now.

Final Script The King is a little upset. We've always believed that centaurs were the best warriors. But we were wrong. I understand now.

Moun Underground

There are more than two survivors, thankfully, but the other survivors' text wasn't touched after the April draft.

April Script I wasn't scared...but it was hard for me not to go and fight.

Final Script I wasn't scared! It was hard for me not to go out and fight.

April Script [Gyan] of Ribble is there. He stood guard at the west gate to save us.

Final Script [Gyan] of Ribble is behind me. He stood guard at the west gate.

Moun

Even with the previous monster occupation, the Arm of Golem is still the talk of the town.

April Script Did you see the Arm of Golem in this town?

Final Script Did you see the Arm of Golem in town?

April Script It moves around as if it's looking for something. Maybe it's body?

Final Script It moves around as if it's searching for something. Maybe it's body?

Oh, and the ancients were Jewish, apparently.

April Script The priest once said, golems were made by the ancient people. Some golems are bad, some are good. I want to see a a good golem!

Final Script The priest once told me that golems were made by the ancients. Some golems are bad, some are good. I want to see a good golem!

Not all of the locals are gripped by the Arm of Golem.

April Script The Arm of Golem suddenly moved a little. Can you throw it away?

Final Script The Arm of Golem suddenly moved a little. Will you get rid of it?

This book isn't about golems. What's the deal?

April Script A book... A PAINTING FLIES!

Final Script A book... A PAINTING FLIES

Nazca Ship

If Zynk isn't in the group, trying to operate the ship is impossible.

April Script [Hero] tried to use the Sky Orb. But, he doesn't know how to use it.

Final Script [Hero] tries to use the Sky Orb. But, he doesn't know how.

April Script Well, [Hero]. Let's go back to look for somebody who knows about this ship.

Final Script Well, [Hero]. Let's go back to look for someone who knows about this ship.

Bowie doesn't actually have to talk to Zynk, though, but here's what he says.

April Script You can start the ship when you place the Sky Orb into the cockpit.

Final Script You can start the ship by placing the Sky Orb into the cockpit.

Astral's profound wisdom:

Translation Notes
Astral's line in the April/June script is identical to his New Granseal HQ line.

April Script [Hero], are you ready for battle?

June Script [Hero], are you ready for battle?

Final Script [Hero], take it easy!

After the crash, the other party members utter a random line when spoken to.

April Script Uuuuu...

Final Script Uuhhh....

April Script What a ride?

Final Script What a ride!

April Script Oh, My twinkling stars...

Final Script Oh, my twinkling stars....

(Source: Original TCRF research)